yet another story?

it’s me again wanting likes and dislike opinions and feed back on this aboriginal Myth:
A long time ago before the aboriginals had a lot of food, the tribe sent out a family of six on a journey to find food. It was a bright and sunny day in the Iroquoian village. Little Angel, who was six, was playing with her little sister Flower. Meanwhile, Red Fox, who was eleven, was teaching his brother Beaver Tail how to play a hunting skills game. Soon, the four children heard their mother, Skylark, calling them for supper. They ran into their longhouse to eat.
After dinner, Chief Big Bear came to speak to their father, Eagle. Eagle and Big Bear stepped outside to speak. When they returned, Eagle took the children’s mother outside. When they came back Skylark announced that the family would be going on a trip to find food for their tribe. The family began to prepare for the long journey.
Meanwhile, across the lake, where the family would be heading, Wolf Man was sitting in
his cave, angrily thinking of a plan to keep the family away from his island. Finally, he had an idea. He called upon the Wind Spirit and ordered him to stop the family from coming to his island. The Wind Spirit agreed and set off to find the family.
The family paddled and paddled and soon began to get tired. Little Angel was bored of entertaining Flower and curled up in a ball. Red Fox too was growing tired but would not show it.
Soon the Wind Spirit began to blow. The lake became rough and waves were created. The canoe tipped over. The family struggled against the waves but it was hopeless. The canoe floated away. Little Angel doggy paddled as fast as she could. She was alone and she was cold. All she wanted was to be on land with her family.
Then she saw land. She swam as fast as her arms and legs would take her. Finally, she reached land and collapsed.
When she awoke she saw her father in front of her. “Hello Little Angel, you are safe now”. Little Angel
hugged her father then said, “where are the others?” Eagle would not make eye contact with his daughter. But, Little Angel was smart for her age and knew that they had not returned.
That night Little Angel helped her father prepare food, however she and her father barely ate. They watched the stars. Suddenly, they heard splashing in the water. Little Angel sat up abruptly and looked out at the water. She saw her brother, Red Fox, struggling to get out of the water. Eagle ran out to help him.
The next day the three people did not do much but stare out at the lake. That evening a huge wave came in carrying a leather sack. Red Fox ran to grab the leather sack before it was forced back into the lake. When he picked it up he saw a little face staring up at him. It was Flower. ” Dad! Little Angel come quick!” The two people ran from preparing dinner to see what Red Fox had. When they saw Flower they were relieved. It was a miracle that a baby who was not even one could live