What do you think of my poem or rap or whatever I wrote?
When it comes down to the game you are nonexistent
Don’t listen to the critics to your opinions I’m resistant
I didn’t get this way by being lazy I had to be persistent
I had to be a leader, and you had to be the assistant
After me you won’t remember the previous
The game is like a recipe and I’m the secret ingredient
I am such a beast; they ask me why I am this way
It’s because I don’t know if I’ll live today
So life’s too short to live afraid
So I give it my all until they dig my grave
When I leave I just hope they know what I gave
I live life in addiction to anguish
My heart is like a wild fire I can’t extinguish
Try to shake it off but I go back to the same shit
I can’t help but feel like I’m in life’s prison
I’m trapped in my cell with no one to listen
Counting down to my death and the clock keeps ticking
This could be my last breath thoughts get sickening
Lights in my head won’t stop flickering
Two sides of my mind can’t stop bickering
The light in my mind keeps getting closer
Is it the light to heaven or a train coming to run me over?
This is actually pretty dang good. I don’t know how the beat is but with a good one you could make a cool song with this. One thing I would change though is, “or a train coming to run me over” to “or a train running me over”. I don’t know why that just seemed to flow more to me, but I have no idea what the beat, tempo, or rhythm is so that could be pretty useless advice, haha.
Anyways, keep it up cause these lyrics are dope.
i really really like it.
Reminds me of some of D Pryde songs.
wow that’s amazing you should write some more songs or rap lol
that was bad ass.. i like the way u kept everything as a flow and u didn’t say stupid shit just to make it rhyme..
i like when u said,
“I can’t help but feel like I’m in life’s prison I’m trapped in my cell with no one to listen”